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"…Are you scared?"

"No. Now, shut up. You're shaking the plane."

"Calm down. There's a greater chance of you being struck by lightning, than anything happening during this flight."

"Look, logically, historically, empirically, I know we're perfectly safe. But, in the dark recess of my mind, I also know this is impossible! Man simply was not meant to scream through the air in a giant sardine tin!"

"The only one screaming, here, is you."

"Your compassion is overwhelming."

"Listen. If you feel nervous, just squeeze my hand. There. Better?"

"…Yeah. Thanks."

"I love you."

"I love you, too."

"Oh, you're going to love meeting my parents- ow!"
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Welcome to another submission for the 100-Word Challenge for Grown-Ups (week 46)!

I didn’t submit to last week’s article prompt (though I did use it as inspiration for another vignette). But this week, we’re back to my bread and butter of flash fiction writing. Prompt as follows, per Julia:
… in the dark recess of my mind …
As usual you have 100 words to add to these 7 making 107 altogether. Make sure you keep the prompt as it is….


I’ve been up and down on planes so many times in the last week-and-a-half, I couldn’t pass up the opportunity to take that somewhat cryptic, almost foreboding prompt of words and make it into something light-hearted…and close to my own experiences.

I don’t usually do straight dialogue-only pieces, but I don’t think any description is really needed, here. Plus, my Songbirds stories are built around simplicity.

Sally Sparrow and Larry Nightingale are owned by BBC and used here without permission.
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And all was safe until Larry tried a barrel roll XD.
The emotion to the piece is certainly prevalent, as is the jostling about. And, with such simplicity, there's not much more to it than that. The ending thud was a great touch too!
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*bonusparts Jun 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! Sally's actually the calm one, here, which I wasn't certain would work. But, the more I thought about it, I liked that the one who dreams about space flight is the one freaked out by being on a plane! :D

I felt the need to add that little thud at the end; it wouldn't quite be the same without it, and it (hopefully) makes the reader pay attention a bit more than they might ordinarily do.
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It worked. I did the classic 3-sec pause ... "Wait, what?" Re-read! XD
And a little Cessna is a far cry from space flight. Not to mention a lot cozier for most. Unless you're Wedge and company, then it's home.
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